“These 100 word challenges are the toughest way to write. I found myself almost two hundred words too much again. Alas I removed the unnecessary and I hope you like what’s left!”
I wrote this story in answer to the following prompts:
Friday Fictioneers – Write a 100-word story based on the Photo Prompt image above by © Ted Strutz
Suspect Transport
‘Yes!’ Nobody’d find me in the roof of this abandoned building.
Well, I made it through the night. Then —
“Alright, boys! do it!” yelled a voice.
Chainsaws cut the building in half; missing my feet by inches. I rolled into a tight corner and watched as the canvas was nailed in place. I was trapped.
Through a gap, I saw my prison loaded onto the white lorry.
‘Where the hell am I going?’ I wondered.
“Windsor Ontario, here we come!” said the driver climbing in and driving away.
“Woohoo! Free ride to Canada. I was escaping America with my loot.”
The End
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Cool idea.
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Good morning, Sadje
Best I could do after 2 hours thought. It’s not terribly exciting but it fulfilled the prompt I think. Thanks for reading!
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Good morning Mason! I think it’s a great story in just 100 words.
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Thank you, Sadje!
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You’re welcome 😉
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There’s always a silver lining.
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Indeed there is. Thanks, Sandra.
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No Visa or passport needed! Free ride to escape 🙂
Very nicely conveyed in 100 words!
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Hello, Anita.
INdeed, the cheapest but maybe uncomfortable way to go! Thanks for reading!
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Dear Mason,
It sounds like it could get quite uncomfortable along the way. Nice job of meeting the hundred word challenge.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Good morning, Rochelle.
Yes, no rest stops, no food and drink. Might as well ship yourself in a cardboard box lol. Glad you liked my story, thank you!
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I enjoyed reading this, so much said in so few words
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Hello, Michael.
Thank you so much!
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That worked out better than expected! 100 words is always tough, a good discipline to learn 🙂
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It sure did!
Yes 100 words is a great way to teach yourself what words are important in a story.
Thanks, Iain.
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You’re going to get very cold, I think; or, if it’s summer, very hot! Good luck!
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Yeah,either way its going to suck lol.
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Brilliant Mason, you didn’t a single word more! From fear to joy in a matter of moments.
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Hello, Keith.
Thank you so much!
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Doing FF has taught me a lot about what is necessary and what isn’t. Adverbs? Unnecessary if you use a strong verb. Redundant clauses and phrases? Out they go. Discipline creates clean, effective writing, and your story could hardly be better than now, when it’s pared down to the bare bones 🙂
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Hello, Linda.
Indeed FF is the perfect writing training for getting tight clean prose.
Thank you for the lovely compliment.
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Now that made me smile! What a great take on the prompt.
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Hello, Jenne.
Thank you so much!
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Ah, an outlaw migrant! 😉
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Haha! Yeah he certainly is. Who says a fasle passport is the only way across the border!
Thanks for reading!
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Mason,
That’s one lucky robber! Hope he’s got enough water and food in there. 🙂
∼🕊Dora
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Yes, and a strong bladder lol.
Thank you so much, Dora.
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That’s certainly a lucky thief! Well done!
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Indeed he is.
Thanks a lot.
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All’s well that ends well. Free travel. Sounds like quite the adventure.
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I just hope he has food, water and a strong bladder lol
Thanks for reading!
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Strong bladder is a must! 😀
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Ha, it almost looked like it was all going wrong when suddenly – result! It certainly didn’t need all those extra words you had to cut.
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Yes, it was the fastest turn of events ever! Just shows how many words we dont need when telling a story doesn’t it.
Thanks for reading!
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Brilliant and so much fun. That’s one lucky robber. And I hear you on the 100 words. Teaches you to find the essential part of the writing.
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Thank you so much!
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I agree. I often come up with around 300 words to start with and then need to cut, cut, cut. I enjoyed where you took the story. That was hilarious, and a clever way to get away with his loot. Free ride!
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It actually makes it fun and more learned to end up with too many words and then work them down to the correct amount isn’t it.
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i guess he can escape the long arm of the law for a while. enjoy it while he can. 🙂
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If he has my luck, he’ll jump of the house right in front of the Canadian police lol
Thanks for reading!
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A bit of luck is a good ingredient for any heist.
Limiting oneself to 100 words is always a challenge. That’s what keeps it interesting.
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Sure is!
This is definately the toughest challenge I’ve written for thats for sure!
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Good luck on his part!
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Indeed, thanks for reading!
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Quite a fun adventure in just 100 words. I’m happy for him that he still has his feet 😉
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Thank you so much. He was a lucky fellow twice I think!
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You’re welcome.
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P.S. I went to your story, created an account, but could find no way to actually vote. Really good story about The Oracle.
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Thank you so much for trying. The vote button is right at the bottom of the story itself. Again thans so much for trying I really appreciate it!
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I just went back and found out what was happening. My firewall wasn’t letting me log in, so I made it a “safe site” which allowed me to log in. Once I logged in I could see the “vote” button — which I did 🙂
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Thank you so much for going back andf doing that for me I really appreciate it! Have a wonderful weekend.
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You’re welcome and you also.
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Ha! Lucky thief. Picked a great getaway hiding place
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Hello, Laurie
Yeah he sure did!
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