“It’s nice to see old friends. Unless they bring dark secrets to light.”
I wrote this story in answer to the following prompt:
Friday Fictioneers – Write a 100-word story based on the Photo Prompt image above by © Russell Gayer
Ghost of Dura
The sight of the van hit Eric like a mouldy white ghost.
Vines hogtied the wheels of the rusting, festering vehicle — but he remembered it.
“Dura, how did you get here?” he breathed. “Last time I saw you, I’d had too many alcopops. I remember driving home. I woke up without you.”
Eric approached the van.
Peering through the glass, he remembered the corduroy seats. The skull gear-shifter left him smiling.
“My guitar!” Eric pulled on the rear door. It groaned open. He stumbled away in horror. The stench of death. A female corpse.
“What the hell happened that night?”
The End
Thanks for reading my friends.
There’s more in the Poetry Corner, Poetry Nook, and the Short Story Collection
Have a great day!
A guitar that turns into a corpse. Now there’s a thing for a heavy metal band to contemplate
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Hello, Neil.
Guess I need to add more words. He remembered his guitar and opened the back to find it. And found the corpse instead.
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It’s okay. I figured it out. I was just tickled by my first reading
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That’s good. Thanks, Neil!
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Ooo now this is trippy. What the hell happened? My vote: the fairies did it. 😀
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Morning, Tannille.
Will there be fairies in your tale by any chance?
Would be intriguing to know what happened that night I reckon.
Thanks for reading.
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Yes, but that haven’t murdered yet; stolen a kid and caused WWIII…
Great opening for a story M. Maybe Holly can solve it.
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Aww, you remembered Holly thank you for that.
She may have to investigate in the future thats for sure.
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Dark hair, piercing blue eyes? Start off at the age of 12 and is now 20? I don’t recall at all! 😀
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I guess she struck a cord with you. I’m so pleased.
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Well we did have a conversation. I enjoy chatting with writers and their creations. 😀
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Indeed we did. Thank you for talking with me. I appreciate it.
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Have you ever joined a writing group before?
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I did that for a little while and then I was forced to move. Now, I’m isolarted in a little tiny village miles from everything.
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Sounds like a perfect writing environment though. I bet your idea of isolation and distance is different to mine, everything is close in the UK!
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That’s true. Peace and quiet all day has its perks.
Yeah the city is seven miles away. Feels like a hundred when you have to go there lol
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You’re joking? 11km (7miles) is nothing. Where I grew up the nearest city was an 18 hour drive, speeding. Now that was a painful trip — “are we there yet?”. 😀
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Holy Crap! You really were in the arse-end of nowhere!
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Actually, I live in Perth now. Dubbed “the most isolated capital city in the world”. Not the arse-end but you can see it lol.
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Isolated but beautiful in terms of seaviews right?
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Best in the world. I’m a beach snob! Nothing compares. Visiting an empty beach is pretty standard. Clear water and white sand.
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Sounds wonderful! It amazes me how people go crazy for places like Bondi Beach. No fun swimming and sunbathing amid 35000 people surely.
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I think exactly the same! I’m accustomed to space, so seeing places like Bondi, Virginia Beach etc, I don’t see the attraction. It would be like walking through the outback/bush/woods/forrest and having people every where.
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absolutely, the whole idea of going to a natural place is to breath and relax. You can’t do that in a crowd so makes it pointless.
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Exactly. I don’t like crowds at all. Nature needs to be isolated to take it in.
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Sure does.
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A lot happened that night.
Corpse in the van is scary.
The incident will haunt forever.
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Hello, Anita!
A mysterious horrifying night for sure!
Thanks for reading!
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That would be the morning after to remember. Unlike the night before, which it appears will escape him.
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Hello, Sandra.
I was thinking he rediscovered the van some years later going by the state it’s in. The fact it’s all shut up made it the perfect place for mummification.
Thanks for reading.
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Great details to paint the scene — and to leave us readers wondering what happened. The skull gear-shifter is awesome.
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Hello, Dave
Thanks, I might have to grow this story to find out what happened!
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Having got away with whatever happened all that time ago, it’s probably best he never remembers! Nice one Mason.
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Hello, Keith.
Agreed, he should just keep walking!
Thanks for reading!
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Oh dear – bet he wishes he hadn’t stumbled on it now!
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No kidding!
Thanks Elizabeth!
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Whatever it was, it was awful. Really good take on the prompt.
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Hello, Linda.
Thank you so much!
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Was *not* expecting a rotting corpse in the back of the van. How is Dura able to stand the stench of it? Good descriptions in this.
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Hello Jade.
Lucky Dura has no nose. She is the van her name is actually written on her in the picture.
Thank you so much for reading and for the kind comments.
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OMG I misread it (the meaning not the name.) It’s way more sinister now I that I *get* it! Sorry for misinterpretation!
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No worries at all. If I had more words I would have explained the vans make and model to make more sense.
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Thanks for your patience. The story is perfect once the reader — I — slow(s) down to appreciate its composition.
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Of course, It’s fun to see how my stories are interpreted anyway. Thanks for reading I appreciate it.
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Strong story, Mason. I like the shift from nostalgia to horror – you manage it very adroitly.
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Hello, Penny.
It switched with me when i realsied the first idea was terrible and the new one hit me in the face. Glad you liked it.
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😳
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Lol, yeah! That somes it up. Thanks, Ruth!
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Dear Mason,
Ooh, that certainly sent chills. That’s a night to forget, or so it seems.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I might have to explore that night further I created the start of an exciting mystery here I think.
Thanks for reading!
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Oh man… nothing like having to face something we didn’t even know we were part of.
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For sure. I think he should keep walking … Pretend he never rediscovered the van.
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Too late, though. That can of worms was opened!
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Yup even if he longs to run his conscience will force him to try to uncover what happened.
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Not that it is right but one almost wishes he had remained oblivious…
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Oblivious would have been the only way to remain unaffected for sure.
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Yes!
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Yikes. Well done.
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Thanks, Judy!
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Now that’s a twist! Maybe it probably explains why his lead vocalist stopped coming to the gigs 😉
Nicely done.
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Hello,
Seems you have the full story all laid out. Are you going to write it?
Thanks for reading.
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Ooh, this is so good! At first I thought he might have found his own corpse. Finding a female corpse there raises so many questions. I love it.
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Thank you!
Seems I have to write and discover what happened with the van.
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This feels like it could be the first chapter of a longer crime novel. Such a great opening! I want to know what happened!
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Yes, it’s asking to be enlarged for sure.
Thanks for reading!
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Lots of mystery here, Mason. More to explore in a longer story if you wanted
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Hello, Elmo.
For sure theres a bigger story here.
Thank you so much!
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Was she a mysterious stowaway? 🤔 Maybe he’s still high & has imagined her? So, many questions.
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Hi, Bernadette.
So true I opened a real mystery here. Maybe one day I’ll extend it into a proper story.
Thanks for reading.
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i guess they have a lot of explaining to do when the cops come to investigate.
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No kidding!
Would you tell the cops or leave and hope the vans never found though?
Thanks for reading!
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What a shocking ending. Poor guy, now he’ll be haunted for life.
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Hi, Russell. He’ll definately be spending a while trying to work out what happened the night he lost his van. Thats for sure.
THanks for reading!
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We’ve all been there but to a very much lesser extent! I lost my V-dub in a multi-storey car park after seeing Hawkwind in Liverpool once!
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So did someone steal it out of the multistory then? I’m so sorry you lost it.
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No we found it but we were hopelessly stoned! A long time ago! We lifted up the red snd white height chain to get in to the multi-storey and surprise surprise the little roof window thing got ripped off when we were driving out!!
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Oh, lol I see! Sounds like a fun misadventure for a story.
Poor car having to go home topless too lol
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Ooooooooo
A great murder thriller here methinks!
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Hello, Laurie.
Indeed – I might have created me more work with this one.
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It might be best if Dura had an unfortunate fire-related accident…
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Now, that’s some smart thinking!
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He needs to start remembering some things pretty fast. Well done.
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Hallo, Athling.
Yes remember or just burn the van and run away!
Thanks for reading!
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Perfectly ghastly. You stole my idea, but did it even better! 🙂
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Hello, Bear.
I’m sorry I stole your idea. I’m pleased you liked how I did it though. People tell me I should turn this into a proper mystery. If you’d like to take that idea and do I’d be pleased.
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Please, do go ahead and make it into a mystery story. I’m more into Classical Science Fiction. Not detailed enough to write a coherent mystery.
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OKay, Maybe, I’ll have a word with my special sleuth Holly and see if she wants to solve it.
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This sounds like a nightmare, he needs to wake up quick.
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Hello, Michael.
No kidding!
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Mason, this is very impactful and clearly the start of something. I think you could easily epand this into something very worthwhiile. welll done
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Hello, Michael.
Thank you so much.
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Oh no. I have a bad feeling that he might not remember but the police may have some questions about this…
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Hmm, thats an interesting theory. Thank you for reading.
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Oh oh. Sometimes it is better to let a sleeping Dura lie …
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Haha! So true, thank you Na’ama!
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🙂
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