Cabin of Hope

“For the lucky there is always a timely intervention to help just when they need it. Oh, it’s so good to get this out after 7 days of being unable to write.”

I wrote this story in answer to the following prompt:
Friday Fictioneers – Write a 100-word story based on the Photo Prompt image above by ©  © Alicia Jamtaas

Cabin of Hope

“Salvation!” I could see a roof wavering in my daze of dehydration.

Sweating buckets, feverish and close to passing out, I raised my bleeding hands and crawled.

Hauling my broken body through the bracken, vines and undergrowth.

The cabin was old, mossy; grown into the woods.

I fell at the weather-worn door.

“Can, I help yer?”

Four barrels swam in my vision. Shotgun. “Wa-ter!” my eyes rolled—Darkness.

I awoke in hospital days later.

When recovered, I returned to the woods to thank the man who saved me.

I found the place but the cabin and man had vanished.

The End


Thanks for reading my friends.

There’s more in the Poetry CornerPoetry Nook, and the Short Story Collection

Have a great day!

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    1. Thank you, Jade. I’m glad you liked it.

      Thanks for asking. I was lost for words. I looked at the prompts each day and couldn’t find anything to write. Like my brain went on holiday. Fortunately it returned today!

      Hope you;re having a lovely day?

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      1. You’re very welcome.

        Brains deserve holidays too. Glad yours came back, refreshed and firing on all cylinders. It is a beautiful day here, thank you for asking. I’m finally going to get to plant my new larch tree. Life is good!

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      2. Yup and mine took a holiday without permission lol.

        Its been hot and sunny here all day but we have a few summer lightning storms moving in and so its cooler and lovely now.

        Larches are such pretty trees. good choice!

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  1. Plenty of good “show, don’t tell” in this story. I particularly liked “Four barrels swam in my vision. Shotgun.” Great way of telling us he’s delirious and seeing double.

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  2. Reading through the comments, it appears most people interpreted this differently from me. I assumed whoever was after your protagonist got to the man in the cabin. Or he’s out for groceries.

    I hate those days when my mind doesn’t want to write. I sit and stare, poke around on the computer…

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    1. I love that everyone had diffeent ideas on what was happening in my story. I like the idea that the man with the shotgun was not the owner of the cabin. That explains well how the cabin owner wasn’t there when he went to thank him. Nice take that!

      Thats what I did. Poke at the prompts, mess about in my story folders, and watched a little football. I’m glad it only lasted a week!

      Thanks for reading and commenting!

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  3. This has a very fairy-taleish feel to it. Maybe his state of dehydration made him connect with some magical universe. I hope you can keep writing and find a solution for your problems (read about it on another comment section).

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