Time’s Up!

“I wanted to do an action adventure with todays prompt picture. Alas 100 words is barely enough to make a character move let alone have an adventure.”

I wrote this story in answer to the following prompt:
Friday Fictioneers – Write a 100-word story based on the Photo Prompt image above by © Roger Bultot

Time’s Up!

If only the Sunday market-goers knew the danger.

“Three bracelets, twelve yen!”

“Talismans! Buy one get one free!”

‘If I fail your souls will be free!’ I thought as I dashed downstairs into the Chinese restaurant.

Bashing through the door, I raced through the sea of plastic tables and entered the spicy kitchen.

“Ahh, Ziang. It’s there,” said a policeman guarding the door.

“Get out — now!” I ordered, dropping beside the bomb.  

Sweating, I unscrewed the case revealing a maze of wires.

I cut a wire.

The timer hit zero.

I threw the timer aside and smiled victoriously.

The End

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  1. I liked the way you used multiple senses to put your readers into the moment. You have sound, with the traders’ shouts, smell – the spicy kitchen, touch as you bash through plastic tables and of course sight. That all helps to bring your scene to life – well done!

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    1. I met Author Brian Jacques when I was a kid. He told my class about ensuring all the senses are including in your scene to help readers be there. So, I always try to do that.

      Thank you so much, Penny!

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    1. Hello, Michael.

      Indeed, blown-up egg fried rice is not so tasty! I’d never done a space set-up with the ellipses before I was pleased with the outcome.

      Thank you for reading!


  2. A sudden shift before the end made me go bang. I thought he may have miss-calculated, but the final line was a relief.
    I wonder if you changed the words ‘the danger’ in the first line to ‘about the ‘bomb’, Would that add more towards readers attention and story tension?
    Just an idea.

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    1. Hello, James.

      The empty spaces was a sudden shot of inspiration that paid off I think.

      Thats a good idea about adding the bomb at the beginning too. THank you for reading and commenting so helpfully.

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  3. You’re correct. Sometimes 100 words is just a drop in an ocean compared to what could be. I can see much more deeply into this tale. Thank goodness he cut the correct wire in the end. Have a great week.

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